Hello there! I have been working on a setting for a while now and I'm looking for feedback. I want to make sure that I didn't leave out anything! Please comment some edits and i'll consider them! Thx everyone!
Rocky Isle, is a island surrounded by jagged rocks. They always seem to rip up humans ships trying to land there...
The currency; beads; are rusted metal coins with a square shape cut from the middle, since dragons reside here, the coins are fairly big as to not lose them easily. About the size of a normal bowling ball. The coins were scattered on the island when the first dragons landed here.
The main tribe of dragon on the island goes by the name SkyClan. Some of the dragons can be as big as a auditorium, while others can be the size of a SUV. They all live in caves carved into the mountain in the middle of the tribe.
Every morning, all the tribe flies to the top of the mountain and listen to their leader Elderstrong's announcements and words of wisdom to start off their day. It fills them with pride and bravery to help them overcome anything...
Some of the dragons sell meat and jewellery around camp to make more beads. The main sales are made by Timben, the best hunter in the island. He makes an little more than average profit and isn't much of a bragger about his wealth.
Under the island, a group of peaceful shadow dragons reside, they have no intention on harming the SkyClans. They are visited by SkyClans every day to chat. But the shadow dragons cannot visit them, for if they are hit with pure sunlight, they could instantly lose their vision. One of them already had, Ol' Lucas, he lost his sight 2 years ago, and has had to learn morse in order to keep writing his stories.The shadow dragons can be visited by traveling down a deep hole hidden in the Forest of Dyn.
The Island also has a lake, When it gets hot, the tribe loves to trot down to the lake and go for a relaxing swim. The younglings always sneak out of their caves to take a dive, even when it isn't hot.
The SkyClan will hold a great festival every month on the cliff South of the tribe. Each dragon brings an offering of food to share at the festival. The dragonlings always play and chat on the edge of the cliff, some even dive off the cliff and glide above the ocean before shortly flying back up to the cliff to do it again!
The wildlife living here include, deer, cow, fox, and Copperback snakes. A very tasty drink can be made by grinding up the Copperbacks and their venom.
In ancient times, dragons and humans were locked into war. Some cave paintings are still present that illustrate this around the island.
Legend says that a egg of metal resides within the mountain, and when the stars align on a special day, the egg will hatch and a dragon of beauty will emerge to thank each clansman for everything they have done.
A creative dragon who goes by the name Yofi, loves to carve small wooden figurines from logs with his claws. She is always taking requests, and will carve anything for the Clan. Yofi lives in the Forest of Dyn, she doesn't want to be a part of the SkyClan. Personally, she thinks it's silly... But, her kindness can't help but carve for them.
Elderstrong: The leader of the SkyClan
Timben: The wealthiest hunter on the island.
Lucas: A blinded Shadow Dragon under the island.
Yofi: A dragon that carves figure from wood.
Rocky Isle, is a island surrounded by jagged rocks. They always seem to rip up humans ships trying to land there...
The currency; beads; are rusted metal coins with a square shape cut from the middle, since dragons reside here, the coins are fairly big as to not lose them easily. About the size of a normal bowling ball. The coins were scattered on the island when the first dragons landed here.
The main tribe of dragon on the island goes by the name SkyClan. Some of the dragons can be as big as a auditorium, while others can be the size of a SUV. They all live in caves carved into the mountain in the middle of the tribe.
Every morning, all the tribe flies to the top of the mountain and listen to their leader Elderstrong's announcements and words of wisdom to start off their day. It fills them with pride and bravery to help them overcome anything...
Some of the dragons sell meat and jewellery around camp to make more beads. The main sales are made by Timben, the best hunter in the island. He makes an little more than average profit and isn't much of a bragger about his wealth.
Under the island, a group of peaceful shadow dragons reside, they have no intention on harming the SkyClans. They are visited by SkyClans every day to chat. But the shadow dragons cannot visit them, for if they are hit with pure sunlight, they could instantly lose their vision. One of them already had, Ol' Lucas, he lost his sight 2 years ago, and has had to learn morse in order to keep writing his stories.The shadow dragons can be visited by traveling down a deep hole hidden in the Forest of Dyn.
The Island also has a lake, When it gets hot, the tribe loves to trot down to the lake and go for a relaxing swim. The younglings always sneak out of their caves to take a dive, even when it isn't hot.
The SkyClan will hold a great festival every month on the cliff South of the tribe. Each dragon brings an offering of food to share at the festival. The dragonlings always play and chat on the edge of the cliff, some even dive off the cliff and glide above the ocean before shortly flying back up to the cliff to do it again!
The wildlife living here include, deer, cow, fox, and Copperback snakes. A very tasty drink can be made by grinding up the Copperbacks and their venom.
In ancient times, dragons and humans were locked into war. Some cave paintings are still present that illustrate this around the island.
Legend says that a egg of metal resides within the mountain, and when the stars align on a special day, the egg will hatch and a dragon of beauty will emerge to thank each clansman for everything they have done.
A creative dragon who goes by the name Yofi, loves to carve small wooden figurines from logs with his claws. She is always taking requests, and will carve anything for the Clan. Yofi lives in the Forest of Dyn, she doesn't want to be a part of the SkyClan. Personally, she thinks it's silly... But, her kindness can't help but carve for them.
Elderstrong: The leader of the SkyClan
Timben: The wealthiest hunter on the island.
Lucas: A blinded Shadow Dragon under the island.
Yofi: A dragon that carves figure from wood.
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