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So, I feel like my character is missing something, is there anything else people generally add to their character sheets? Take a look at Nikkolai, and if you can, tell me any generic info he may be missing (or whatever you'd like to see,) I'm here to (try to) please, info I feel he may be missing is something that would make him more... I dunno, approachable, rp wise? like, something that when I advertise people are just like "I wanna try playing with this guy" and just go for it, ya know? also, let me know if I'm posting in the wrong forum, I get confused surprisingly easily.

There's no personality. Nothing to say who he is, what he likes, what sort of stories you want to tell with him. We know he's well above average on a scale there's not a ton of context for, and he looks like a popular character from an anime.

Basically, there's no hook there except for his appearance and a cool name. Nothing to spark a story. You don't need a ton of detail to catch interested parties, but you need a little something for interested people to grab onto.

Any better? I added a bit in the "Fun stuff about Nikk" section. ^^

Considerably. Just that splash of detail makes a ton of difference.

Any other important details? Like something I overlooked or forgot about? Or, maybe I should ask what you get from him thus far?

Different people will want different levels of detail, so there's no good answer to that. Pan's bio is relatively sparse, because I want her and her abilities to be adaptable to different settings, but that sparseness can be offputting to folks. Just personal preferences.

As to what I get from him.

I get the feeling you want to write a powerful character who's pretty irreverent with a taste for heterosexual, mildly kinky sex. I also have a sense that you've an elaborate mythology and vision in your head for his setting and abilities, which isn't explicitly in the bio.

For example, Nikk is half dragon shifter, quarter elf, quarter shadow demon. I have a vague idea what all those mean, but the /specifics/ vary a lot based on the setting in question. Tolkien elves are different from D&D elves, which are different from Elfquest or anime elves. Dragon shifter sounds like someone who can turn into a dragon, but there are a million types of dragons in different myths, legends, and fantasies, so what does that mean? Shadow demon are similar. I've seen at least a half dozen different Shadow Demon characters on RPR, and each writer had their own idea of what that mean.

Now, you don't need to spell out everything in the bio. You really don't. You just need to be ready and willing to work with a writing partner to make sure both of your writing and genre expectations are on the same page.

well, mostly the shadow demon lends to his mischievous personality as well as the touch of shadow in his shadowflame ability. the elf and dragon shifter in him makes him age extremely slowly (which is pointed out when I said he looks in his 20's but is actually a few centuries old) the elf in him is basically a tolkien elf, and the dragon shifter, which the shifter part is nullified by the other bloodlines, just gives him his firepower and way-above-average statistics. So, he's... I suppose he's mostly a humanoid with a mischievous streak? That's the best way I can describe it, really in case you wanted to know or anything.

The term 'Dragon Shifter' strongly implies shapeshifting to me, so I never would have guessed he couldn't change forms. Interesting.

that would make sense, maybe he just hasn't unlocked the ability to shift yet. But that was my original thought for him was the demon and elf nullified the shifting ability.