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I just want opinions on my characters. Any suggestion or remark is welcome.
I mostly refer to Dylan and Will.

What I like most about Dylan's profile is how you included a 'basic info' section and used bolded text to separate particularly important character attributes from the rest of the bio! I'm no expert on writing out character biographies or anything, but I think it's a pretty smart way to make it more accessible to readers by giving them the option to either read it normally or skim it for a quick overview. He's okay for a character and I especially like how you mentioned he used to be a know-it-all but matured enough to stop doing it.

There do happen to be a few misspelled words here and there (really only just 'clasify' and 'wierd', but I possibly could've missed others) but it's nothing that a proofreading couldn't fix.

As for William, I think he's a great character. Maybe that's just my soft spot for all things magic-related shining through, but I enjoyed reading about him and his trust issues. My only concern about his biography is that here are a couple walls of text in it, but breaking them up into more manageable chunks would probably make reading easier.

Tl;dr - I think both of your characters are good, but I like William's story more than Dylan's and Dylan's biography format more than Will's.