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I created a character called Henry Lynch. I know I haven't done his past yet I'll get to it later. I was just looking for advice on his personality, its taken me quite a while to write it. Thanks

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Given how the layout is of the profile, it's a little difficult to make sense of at a first glance.

What do you mean by that?

I think that for me what makes it harder to learn about his personality is the long quiz-like details at the bottom, especially when a lot of them don't seem to have (at the time I'm writing this) answers that tell me anything about ~who he is.

While those quizzes are very good chisels for excavating the finer details of your character, the ultimate result of the effort should be a finished product that looks and feels like a presentation.

I think that up at the top, Lynch could benefit from having a paragraph style summary of who you feel he is, what he wants out of his average interactions with people, and a hint as to where he's been.

Keep all your other work, of course, but it is in paragraph-form, not quiz-form, that people will get to first know him

Okay, thanks for that. I'll do my best to improve it.

I have improved my character description.

Hey! You did! Great way to condense all the quiz information into an easily read profile. That works much better.

Thanks. Anything I can do to improve it?